I am a student at in Uru MÄnuka. In 2020 I was a year 8 and in 2021 I will be a year 9. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
Hello today in class we have been doing a poem about one thing we have done that was wrong after that we went onto canva so we could make it look nice. Its a part of the book on the road here it is I hope you like it.
You worked so well this period to finish your poem, create a poster on Canva AND share to your blog. Well done! I wonder if when we have time to look at this again, you can work on your poster some more. Remember we focussed on the format of the poems and which bits go on which lines. When I look at your DLO here they are all mixed up again.
This will show how your work goes from a first draft to a final copy. You can share it again on another post.
Great fixing up, Isaac! It would have been good to keep the original and then added the new one beside it so we could see how your learning changed and improved after applying feedback! It's okay to have drafts and "first tries" on your blog!
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Kia ora Isaac
ReplyDeleteYou worked so well this period to finish your poem, create a poster on Canva AND share to your blog. Well done! I wonder if when we have time to look at this again, you can work on your poster some more. Remember we focussed on the format of the poems and which bits go on which lines. When I look at your DLO here they are all mixed up again.
This will show how your work goes from a first draft to a final copy. You can share it again on another post.
- Miss Birtch
Great fixing up, Isaac! It would have been good to keep the original and then added the new one beside it so we could see how your learning changed and improved after applying feedback! It's okay to have drafts and "first tries" on your blog!
ReplyDelete- Miss Birtch