Term 1, Week 4
What a fantastic day it was last Friday. I enjoyed getting in the water most of all, but I also enjoyed making the rip out of sand and then watching it work when the big wave came in. This week for writing, we are writing a recount about this fun day. Use the templates to help you draft and check your story. Add the photos or scan your own drawings.

Beach Education Recount

WALT: Write a recount about the BEACH EDUCATION activity last Friday.

Topic: Beach Education Audience: Kauri class, whanau, worldwide blog audience. Purpose: To tell people about what happened when we went to Beach Education.

Text type: Recount

Key Vocabulary and Sentence Beginnings: South New Brighton Surf Lifesaving Club.

Planning your recount: Brainstorm P1: Introduction: Who? When? Where? Why? Kauri, Rimu, bus P2: What happened? Why/How? Classroom P3: What happened next? Why/How? Beach, water, Conclusion: What happened in the end? How did you feel about it? What did you enjoy the most? What do you hope for next time? Tired, cold,

Structure: Start Writing here: Title: P1: P2: P3: Conclusion: When you have finished writing: MARK YOUR WRITING: 1. Have a conference with Mr M 2. Mark your own writing using the paragraph rubric below. 3. Mark with a buddy using the paragraph rubric below. BLOG YOUR WRITING: Copy your writing into a Doc in your writing folder. Add some of the photos above to make your writing pop for the reader. Post your writing onto your blog. IF YOU WANT TO, CREATE ART FOR YOUR WRITING AND PUT ON YOUR BLOG: 1. Draw a quality image that represents your writing using pencil and colour pencil. 2. Scan the image to your email and put it on your blog. Marking My BEACH EDUCATION Paragraphs What I need to do Explained to me Me / 5 Buddy / 5 Mr M / 5 1.CONTENT I have a key idea in the first paragraph sentence - supported by details in following sentences. Each paragraph is about ONE main idea. The idea has detail in the next sentences. ? ? ? 2.SENTENCE BEGINNINGS I’ve carefully chosen vocabulary and clauses as sentence beginnings. Sentences begin differently. Sentences begin in interesting ways using 'Adverbial Clauses'. ? ? ? 3.VARIETY OF SENTENCES I’ve carefully chosen a variety of sentence types lengths complexities. Sentences are different lengths (sizes). Some sentences are Complex (long with detail), some Simple (short and powerful). ? ? ? 4.VOCABULARY I’ve carefully chosen clever vocabulary and have used it appropriately. The right words (key vocab) have been used to add detail and say exactly what you mean, and make sense. ? ? ? 5. LANGUAGE Language uses the right tenses and vocab. Writing makes sense. The right tenses ( past, present, future) and vocabulary (interesting words) are used in the right place. ? ? ? 6. PUNCTUATION Sentences are clear with appropriate punctuation. Capitals are used for sentences beginnings. Capitals are used for proper nouns (names of people and places). Full stops are used at the end of sentences. Commas, question marks, speech marks and exclamation marks used in the right places ( . , ! ? " "). ? ? ? Me: Star and a wish Star: Wish: Buddy: Star and a wish Star: Wish: Mr M: Star and a wish Star: Wish:

i am a poem

AM Poem

WALT: Use adjectives and sentence beginnings to make our writing interesting.

PTopic: All About Me! Audience: PES, whanau, worldwide blog audience. Purpose: To tell your blogging audience about you.

Text type: Expressive poetry, Oral

Key Vocabulary and Sentence Beginnings: Fabulous, gentle, gorgeous, groovy, delighted, fantastic, superb, welcome, family, rugby, netball, drawing, painting, reading

Helpful Links: List of Adjectives

I am cool i like to shout and i like animals S sharing is good A apples i love A apple cinnamon    Constaktion i like What words you like to use in your writing? *If you finish early iShare with Mr. M so that he can print it out to make the class look awesome. Post your poem onto your blog. Comment on the ‘I am’ poem of a friend. Create a ‘You are’ poem for a special member (like your mum, dad, aunty, uncle or grandparent hint, hint brownie points people!).